Comments on: Team 1:Adonis Tapestry http://worldsofwordcraft.wordpress.com/2008/11/30/team-1adonis-tapestry/ Digital Narrative and Critical Thinking about Narrative and New Media Thu, 22 Oct 2009 23:11:14 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 By: aseniel http://worldsofwordcraft.wordpress.com/2008/11/30/team-1adonis-tapestry/#comment-355 aseniel Mon, 01 Dec 2008 21:34:38 +0000 http://worldsofwordcraft.wordpress.com/?p=687#comment-355 Go back and revise please. Typos are distracting. We'll just have to chalk it up to turkey coma. It is obvious that you were very excited about your idea and I love the visual of your "scrap of paper". Content.....I was really wanting you to pitch me your idea as if I was the Goddess on High of Blizzard/Atari/EA/what have you. After all I am holding the purse strings on a $50 million dollar deal and you have to excite me. Tell me why I want to play and how the world will look to me as a player. "You have been whisked to the shoulders of Olympus by the handsome but mecurial (hahaha) Cupid. He has wasted his arrows shooting the likes of Apollo and needs, regretfully, mortal assistance in regaining the tools of his trade. Here is where YOU come in......" Go back and revise please. Typos are distracting. We’ll just have to chalk it up to turkey coma. It is obvious that you were very excited about your idea and I love the visual of your “scrap of paper”.

Content…..I was really wanting you to pitch me your idea as if I was the Goddess on High of Blizzard/Atari/EA/what have you. After all I am holding the purse strings on a $50 million dollar deal and you have to excite me. Tell me why I want to play and how the world will look to me as a player. “You have been whisked to the shoulders of Olympus by the handsome but mecurial (hahaha) Cupid. He has wasted his arrows shooting the likes of Apollo and needs, regretfully, mortal assistance in regaining the tools of his trade. Here is where YOU come in……”

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